Thursday, 13 March 2014

Imogen's amazing Burma trail writing

My heart is pounding at the thought of the Burma trail. Thinking of the darkness and people hiding waiting for us incessant children to come past. I'm wondering if anyone will scream loud enough to wake the dead. 

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  1. Amazing writing Imogen! I like how you have used "I wonder if anyone will scream loud enough to wake the dead"Next time try to use something other than "people".By Arwa

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    1. I agree with Arwa. But next time try to use a better word than"Loud".By Natasha

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  2. I really like your description Imogen and I loved how you said 'my heart was pounding' .
    By Mia

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