Narrative Writing - choose one of these pictures and use it as inspiration for a story.
Write one paragraph that would be the introduction to your story.
Remember what we are learning in class about the features to include in your introduction.
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Photo 4 : Mum! can I please go out "NO" says Mum please please please "NO" But what you can do is go to the supermarket and get some eggs , apples &milk and don't you dare go into that place am I clear "fine" I shout as I slam the door behind me then a mysterious shadow grabs me by the arm and drags me into the " no mum said not to go in the " I don't even get time to finish and soon I am in there the place called "the forest" the place that mum told me not to go into. Maybe I should find my way out of here or maybe I shouldn't......
ReplyDeleteWhat a great introduction Arwa! I like how you have made a quite mysterious beginning to your story. I am looking forward to finding out what happens next! Remember to go back and check your punctuation before you publish. Don't forget the full stops. By Mrs M.
DeleteI start to climb through the bushes trying to get out. Then I saw a bed handing from some trees, what is a bed doing in the middle of the forest? I started to admire the bed. This bed looks familiar have I seen it before? That's right it's Uncles bed, just then the shadow came again and took me home. "I don't want to go home"! I shout and start to go back to the forest after walking in the forest for an hour I found an empty spot where the bed was before "that's weird" I say " it was here a minute ago" I start to search for the path where's that path? I wondered to myself I started to cry just then the shadow came again and pulled me out "don't ever come back again" the forest said.
DeleteBy Olivia
photo3
ReplyDeleteThe light poking out of the trees lead me foward.As the path comes to an end i wonder were i will go next.I follow the dark line left on the grass from a law mower until i relise i am in the middle of the road but before i have time to get to the other side the next car zoomed infront of me like a wind storm . after 10 cars went past the road cleard up like a dark forest and then tears from the clouds that give us sunshine fell on the dry silky thing that sits on my head .Finally i made it to the other side.By Bailey
Great description Bailey, I really like how you said: tears from the clouds that give us sunshine fell on the dry silky....
DeleteThat is a very good introduction.
By Lara
Suddenly there two paths what one is right think is it right or left I chose right then I started to walk down then it was a dead end so I tried them next one the after a while I saw my way out into the real world
DeleteBy Caleb
DeleteGreat intro Bailey. You could use some better words but other then that I really like your story.
DeleteLara
Photo 1. Meet me at the building on the huge rock in the sea in five minutes yelled Jackson. OK yelled Benjamin. On the way when Benjamin was in his boat,suddenly the engine stopped and then bang.....
ReplyDeleteSorry but who is this from??
DeleteHow is this.By Jacob.
DeleteBy Jadon.
DeleteThe engine cut off. we were stuck halfway across the bay and the oars were still in Jackson`s bedroom. I told him he`ed need it someday. That`s the problem with people these days, to many fights. I looked back across the lake. OMG!!!
DeletePeople do fight lot`s these days! A giant squid was pulling them into the lake!
well, like our mum used to say,'you should always be ready for the unexpected. Well, next thing you know, a giant ghost pirate ship comes along.
By Ben.
Wow that's an awesome second part of my story Ben.By Jadon
DeletePhoto one.
ReplyDelete"Okay?" I yell ,"fine" She says, we're off to our secret hide out ,later on when Lucy and I get there we both stop and freeze "Oh no, it can't be" she sobs "maybe it could" I start then sigh.
By Grace
What great introduction to a story.
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Photo4
ReplyDeleteCome on get up here and get your things sorted out quickly we have a big day of hunting ahead of us. Look there's one a deer click BANG fletch ????
By Fletcher
Photo 1: I`ve heard many myths and legends of this place before. And I just can`t name the amount of vampire hunters that have been killed here since the Counts moved in. Now you must be thinking 'huh, what a bunch of balony, as if vampires even exist.' But you`re wrong. My vampire hunting career has lasted 19 years so far, and soon I`m going to be famous for killing the Count. Legend has it, that millions of years ago a servant named Igor moved in, and did a deadly and dangerous spell. I can`t remember the name, it`s to Latin-ish. Any way, it can only be performed once a century, when the moon is
ReplyDeletebetween the orbit of planet 9461 (a distant star) then you need a dead vampire body, a bottle of blood, and mutter a few words. The Count should be rising any moment now...
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DeleteWho is this from?By Natasha
DeleteThis was by me. By Ben.
DeleteWow!!!! what a great orientation Ben. By Jadon
DeleteBrilliant work BEN your story is great keep that terrific writing
DeleteBy Caleb .
Photo 2.
ReplyDeleteI feel the sweat dribble down my hand as I focus my eyes on the dark and lonely city.All these questions spread in my mind, while I was trying to answer my thoughts the door slammed open,and a familiar coat swayed around "it's terrible right".I nod in belief and sigh in disappointment..........
By Natasha
Photo 1
ReplyDeleteI woke up in the morning, I jumped out of bed and stumbled over to my draws and pulled out some clothes and chucked them on. I looked out of the window. The sky was blue and there were birds flying around everywhere. I ran downstairs and put my jacket on. When I opened the door all I could see was a big lake that was very calm and still. I went outside and hoped into the boat and rowed to school. ''Oh No" I cried, ''I forgot my school bag!!!......................''
By Lara
I rowed as fast as I could and trying not to hit any of the rocks. As I stopped a gigantic, dark shadow appeared underneath me, I thought it was just some coral but once I jumped out of the boat, the shadow got bigger and bigger and bigger until it snatched the boat... By Mia
DeleteRight before my very eyes
Deletelara's writing
DeleteI quickly boated back to grab my school bag from the big tall house I live in.I ran straight past my mum and grab my school bag. I jumped in to the boat and boated to school but by the time I was five meters away from my house I realised it was 8:55.
By Bailey
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DeleteWell done Lara I found it really funny. Next time use a better word than big.
DeleteBy Alex.
Wow nice writing Lara! I liked how you said I jumped out of bed. Next time you should describe the lake a bit more.
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ReplyDeletePhoto 4
ReplyDeleteHer shrieks chilled me to the bone. She stumbled through deep dark woods dragging her dead leg behind her. She suspected someone was following her but because of her bad eyesight she couldn't tell. I watched as she struggled pulling her dead leg up the rope ladder. Her leg got caught in the rope. "Help!"
By Emma :)
Then suddenly I hear a little crunch the a munch of leaves being steped on.
DeleteI try to say something but nothing comes out, I think I was afraid that they'll capture me.
I hear a gentle voice "Hello what are you doing here?" I freeze then open my mouth "hi I'm just, ummm you know " she gave me a hard stare.
I think then I have an idea "Helpppppppp!"
Grace
she was screaming and screaming until she saw something from a long distance away sweat dribbled down her red puffy check. for some reason the shadow appeared to be getting closer and bam a guy was gripping his hand onto her dead leg like he wanted it or something After awhile she was being dragged on the scruffy dirt. She was trying to call out but her croaky throat blocked her voice.By Liam j.
DeleteWow Emma
DeleteWe'll done your writing is awesome
Next time you could do HELP instead of Help.
You could also describe the characters in your story's bit more.
By Zara
photo 4 As I wake up hearing the vosie of a littlie boy calling for help I look around 'this is not my bed room' I say to my self so get up I look around I see something in the shadows of the trees but if only I knew what I find the littlie boy. He says to me 'I think someone is watchng us I run back to the bed I hope in it . It takes me back to my bed room in my bed . By Zara..
ReplyDeleteWow. Zara this is excellent. Just remember to check your spelling before you press publish. By Freya
DeletePhoto 3 as I walk thorough a dark forest at the end a sudden bright shines past me, what's waiting for me.
ReplyDeleteBy Jasleen
I feel a sudden urge to run half of me is scared. I should have known not to come here at night. It flys by again and again. I stay put it comes at me again I prepare and run it follows me stop it I scream helplessly. My heart is racing what should I do I think. It's midnight my minds playing tricks on me I should have known.
DeleteBy James
DeleteWow James that's a great next part to the story .
DeleteI didn't know you were that good.
Photo one:
ReplyDeleteAs I climb up the stairs it was my big brother's idea to go into the haunted house. "Hurry up" he yelled from a few stairs up but he is right behind me is this house acutally haunted? I go up a few more stairs "hurry up Sam" there's that sound again but how does it know my name?
By Olivia
Part two of Olivia's writing.
DeleteWe get to the top of the stairs. I hear the voice again, in the corner of my eye I see a big, dark shadow. I try to cover my eyes but I was shaking so bad I couldn't. I turn to run down the stairs but the spooky shadow keeps saying my name. "WHO ARE YOU!!!" I yell . . . . . .
By Lara
Nexts time show not tell by Zara
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ReplyDeleteI stared sadly at the remains of my city that crumbled to ruins last night. The brightness of the sun only brought the slighest bit of joy to the land. I knew that I would die from starvation and thirst so I carefully searched for a hint of life. Then a groan of a soul called for me far beneath the earth. I was frightened to the core. But for some reason I felt safer than I had before. The rage of wanting to dig for the suffereing caller overpowered me. Suddenly a thought hit my mind.
By Teeshan =)
DeleteAmazing introduction Teeshan!!!
DeleteI like how you have included interesting words and also hooked the reader in by saying ''suddenly a thought hit my mind''at the very end so people would like to read more.By Natasha
I mean suffering. By Teeshan.
DeletePhoto3 Going deep into the jungle suddenly I start to imagine that lions and tigers are chasing the dark green jeep. I wake up from my fantasy land and realise that I am nearly about of petrol in the middle of the jungle with no phone. By Caleb
ReplyDeleteThen I realized that I am getting chased by lions and tigers. Without a second to spare I slammed the accelerator down."Yay" I've lost them but suddenly the green jeep stopped. I looked at the fuel gauge. That's when I remembered that I was almost out of petrol and now the tank is completely empty. By Jadon
DeleteI hear a noise it was passers by I yelled for help the came I'm saved or so I thought it teared out these people wernt who I thought the were they were criminal master minds great I'm suffed
Deleteit was me against the word swinging my sword and making my way though the jungle when I stop to admire the glistening light shining though the tree tops I try to continue but I mesmerised my this sight I am disturbed by a near by scream for help how is it and why is she screaming...... By Imogen
ReplyDeleteGreat story Imogen, but which photo are you writing about?
DeleteBy Ben.
I think it's photo 4 Ben. By James
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Deletesorry forgot to correct it is meant to be mesmerised by not my
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ReplyDeleteBoom the city came crashing to the ground. My brother Percy helped all the survivors and me to the top of the building. The destruction of the monster was massive the hole city wasn't there. Sam yelled Percy we have company.there was a weird roar and then a creek.
By James
The ground rumbled and the ground began to split.6 fluffy dragons flew out the ground they brought great terrier to the city they set every thing on fire and took over the contre
DeleteBy Dean
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ReplyDeleteI have lived here for ages. I was stolen away in the night. I don't know how long I've been here exactly but the building has started to get covered in moss. There is only one way to escape and that's by boat with only one door to exit out of... By Alex.
Wow Alex I'm hooked into your story introduction it is amazing
DeleteBy Tayla
We'll done Alex you have really hooked me in. Next time you could use a better word than exit. By Freya
DeleteThat is amazing Alex you have done a wonderful job. Next time you could have used changed a few words.
DeleteBy Jasleen
WOW I really got hooked in with your introduction it's awesome.I REALLY!! want
Deleteto hear more.
By Jadon
Wow Alex! That was an awesome introduction! I wish someone will continue that for home learning week 4!
DeleteBy Ben.
Wow Alex, that's a really good story. It really hooks the reader in.
DeleteI think next time you could use some better words but other then that I love your story.
Lara
Wow Alex that was awesome . By Zara
DeleteGreat story Alex!!!
ReplyDeleteI like how you have hooked the reader in.Next time think about show not telling because you have "I was stollen in the night.By Natasha