Tuesday, 28 October 2014

Home Learning Week 3

Memoir/Personal Experience Writing

We are going to begin Memoir writing this week. An important part of writing an excellent Memoir is choosing the appropriate vocabulary and using a variety of sentence lengths. 
Read the following piece of writing and make a comment about what you liked about it and why. Also comment on how this example can help you with your own writing.

(This is from the NZ Curriculum English Exemplars on the TKI website) 

30 comments:

  1. I like this piece of writing because this person explains clearly how he/she got into this situation and i think that is really important when writing a memoir.
    By Mia

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  2. I like how the writer has wroten his writing because he/she used CAPITAL LETTERS for some words and it sound interesting.
    This will help me with my writing bcause now I know that this writing is a writing that you write like you say it.
    Grace

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  3. I like this piece of writing because hooks the reader in and you always want to keep on reading and this writing also has descriptive words like "SLOP!" and "SPLAT!"
    The thing that will help me with my writing is that I can follow this structure for when I am writing my memoir.

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  4. I like this piece of writing because the author started the story in present, changing to past then slowly getting back to present.
    By Ben.

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  6. I like this piece of writing because it said I HATE Brussels sprouts and when it says "SLOP and SPLAT"
    This will help me with my writing because I will use punctuation and better vocabulary
    By ZARA ❗️❗️❗️

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  7. I like the way he/she used explanation marks! Full stops. And "speech marks"

    By Olivia

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  8. I like the way he/she used capital letters for some words to make it more interesting.
    By Arwa

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  9. I like the way they said words like TWANG! and THOP! I think this will help us in our writing because it is helping us learn the structure of the writing. by Bailey

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  10. I like how the author has used words like I HATE Brussel sprouts and TWANG THOP. By Fletcher

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  11. I like the way that the start really hooks you in so you want to read on. For exmaple the TWANG-THOP how it's in bold also.
    By James

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  12. I like how at the beginning it says what's happening then it goes back to how it began.
    By Cole

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  13. I like the way they used a lot of slang words. This is going to help me in my writing because I will use it to.By Liam

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  14. I like this it's got really good woulds it's got really good woulds TWANG-THOP I like how it's in capabil leates

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  15. I liked it because it was interesting and decripdive.by Nathan

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  16. It was clear what happened ad interesting TWANG-THOPBy Caleb

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  17. I like this writing because at the start it has got two exiting words TWANG-THOP
    this will help me with my writing because it is very descriptive. By Freya :]

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  18. I like this piece of writing because he has clearly written his problem and how he solved it and shown his expressions .This will help me in my memoir writing because I will use descriptive language.By Natasha

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  19. I like this writing cause it stops us from using easy or normal words to harder words. By Jasleen

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  20. i like this writing because it is really descriptive witch can help us with are writing

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  21. I didn't like this writing. The only thing that appealed to me was the words that had capital letters the whole way through. I could use this to show a strong point when writing a memoir but I have my doubts. By Teeshan.

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  22. I like this writing because it went straight to the main point of the story. I also like this writing because the writer made me feel like the person in the story was real. I think this writing will help me with how to make the person in my story feel real. By Alex

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  23. I did not like anything about this story. I do think that the writer used interesting words like TWANG-THOP to start the story. This will help me with my writing as I will also try to use interesting words to begin my stories. By Tayla

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  24. I like discritive writing because they used lots of details. By Debashish.

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  25. It was,t describing it enath

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  26. I like how this writing uses really descriptive words in it. It could help us use more interesting words in our writing in and out of school.
    By Emma

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  27. I liked the hole story. It had some awsome vocab and I loved the story. By Liam b

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